If you think you can improve on this even further to make it sing, then feel free to copy and paste into a word document and send up your comments and track changes edit. We’re always looking for people who can help improve the standard of the stories we put out, and whether you’re a writer, editor or proofreader there are multiple series that we are producing at any given time.
Note: If by improvement you think we mean “apply rigorous grammatical rules”, then this isn’t the right place for you. Our readers like our informal style. We’re not geared towards producing Pulitzer prize-winning prose. Story comes first and insisting on correct construction – even if you’re correct – is going to bog our storytellers down. I couldn’t argue with you about whether we should use an Oxford comma or not, and if we’re having those conversations something is wrong!
